Luuv…revised

Today, you have a special purpose: To revise, improve, and polish your written love stories in preparation for handing in the final draft on TUESDAY, by 3:45pm. (The deadline changed because of our fieldtrip).

If you handed in a rough draft, I’ve now given it back to you and you probably have some specific comments to work with. In general, here’s what I’ve noticed most of you need to focus on:

  • Conflict: Choose a main conflict around which to focus your story, and pump it up. Explain why the problem was happening, whom it affected, and exactly how. Be thoughtful about it, and surprise us!
  • Climax: Build up the main conflict to a climax where a crucial decision or action is taken. Make it obvious that it’s the climax by using exciting language and by describing what happened in vivid detail
  • Work in a quote from Romeo and Juliet. Maybe something like this: In that moment, I felt just like Juliet when she said to Romeo, “blahBLAH blahBLAH blahBLAH blahBLAH blahBLAH” (act#.scene#).
  • When you think you’re done, read the whole story through to yourself, in a quiet voice. Fix awkward and run-on sentences. Spell check, then check it again yourself. Have someone else read through it if you have time. Your final grade will depend, in part, on how polished you make this final draft.

Speaking of final grades, here’s how this paper will be graded:

  • 15 points: You followed the structure of a narrative, as defined in class: Intro characters and setting; problem; attempted solution; bigger problem; another attempted solution; climax; denouement.
  • 5 points: Your story recounts some experience you’ve had with “love” (aka, luuv) and sheds some light on the mysterious reasons people fall in and out of love.
  • 5 points: You incorporate a quote from Romeo and Juliet in an effective way in your story that shows you understand the quote. You properly cite the quote with act and scene numbers.
  • 10 points: Grammar, spelling, punctuation, sentence structure, and formatting are all correct.

That’s all you have to do.

Revise, friends. Go deep!

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